not bad sounds like a childs story tho
The world is like the moon. There are times that you see its beauty. There are times that you see its darkness. There are even times when it is shrouded by the clouds. Reach for the stars. Then you will always see its beauty. -My father
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It does? I wouldn't think so, because there are violence, blood, and sexual content (or stuff like that). What are children into nowadays? Perhaps it seems as such, because I have not used curse words, sex, or killing. However, I do plan on adding those into the story as it progresses.
Still, I am glad that you enjoyed my unfinished story. -KN
I really like it. However using present tense makes the phrasing awkward.
Stories are always in present tense. -KN
Also to comment on kikoforce's comment. Sadly there are kindagarteners that know a fuck load about sex and violence. Atleast where I live, the wonder of yuppies parents letting their children use the internet unwatched.
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werewolf6666
WOW..., again.
this is such a good story, you realy have talent in writing stories.
each line is breath taking and makes you want to read more.
in one word just AWSOME!!
JinNJuice
I'll be sure to put more. -KN